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the last line in the second stanza and the last line in the third stanza (sorry, i didn't know how to grammatically combine those two) are a bit off with ...

this is a very cute poem - i just have minor suggestion: could you slip in some words with the last two lines - the rhythm feels off from itself ...

i, also, had to read this a couple of times, but it definitely made me think. the title really hooked me and my favorite stanza was as follows: Wasted days ...

i loved this poem, but the repetition of "she was born in august" didn't have much as effect as it was meant to have because he poem was so short. ...

i agree with everyone else. it was amazing, as such your poetry tends to be, but the ending sort of ruined the whole poem. no, actually it didn't. i just...didn't ...

i printed this poem out. i loved it. i write you more later on a keyboard that has a backsapece backspace key. haha

I applaud this. it was beautiful. the title was very...er...wity (sorry for all spelling mistakes - i've misplaced my backspace key) i loved the images and the last line was ...

though short, this poem rang with experience and skill. i loved the vocabulary adn the images. (sorry for all misspelling here forward - i seem to be missing a backspace ...

Sweet and somber they will whisper To you in the dark of night The empty and cold, eerie whisper That shakes your synapses alight Creeping, seeping – much like liquid ...

She always liked drinking cold coffee The Saturday mornings all faded into each other And formed a black-brown blur of fantasies Her fiction lifestyle slipping past her eyes The tongue-setting ...

well, i definitely undestand that you had strong flow of emotions when you wrote this, but usually when we are in our rapture our poetry is not always our best. ...

well, yeah, this doesn't fit. i mean, it has a good meaning and all, but you didn't develop it well, nor did you use many poetic references. it didn't have ...

That.was.beautiful. I loved this poem - the images and the way you descriped your feelings, the way they ran so equally with mine and everyone else's was perfect. I've always ...

this was a relatively good poem. i found nothing amazing or outstanding about it, and i must mention that the one line, "All turns to golden glass," reminded me of ...

i share common feelings. i loved the "umop" (though it took me a while to get it) and the imagery is absoltuely outstanding. the meaning of the poem shinging through ...